March 26, 2012

The Lucky 7 Meme

Welcome to the Lucky 7 Meme! This is a bit of Monday fun where writers get to read and share bits of their unpublished work. This game was passed on to me by my witty friend Laird Sapir. Thanks, Laird! 


Lucky 7 Meme


The rules:
1. Go to page 77 of your current manuscript/work-in-progress (or page 7 if you don't have 77)
2. Go to line 7
3. Copy down the next 7 lines, sentences, or paragraphs, and post them as they’re written.
4. Tag 7 authors, and let them know.
So here's a sneak peek at my work-in-progress, a middle grades (ages 9-12) fantasy novel. It's definitely still under construction...


Captain Daevin looked at them all and sighed. “I suppose we’ll start from the beginning.” He straightened his shoulders and raised his voice.
“All right! When I say salute, this is what I want to see!” He snapped his booted heels together. Then he tapped two fingers of his right hand to his left shoulder and flicked them crisply to his forehead. “I want two straight lines! Salute!”
In confusion, the children shuffled into two lines. Jude gently scooted Ellie a bit to the left. She tried to imitate the gesture Captain Daevin had performed.
“Not good enough!” barked the captain. “This is a military ship now! We must have discipline!”
They tried the salute nearly fifteen times before the captain would accept it as “good enough.” Then he brought out a crate and thunked it down on the floor before them.
“You are soldiers now! Our Enemy will not spare you because you are children. You must learn to fight back.” His eyes gleamed. “It is time to choose your weapons.”
The crate was only half-full and many of the things inside looked old and rusty. Broken pieces were scattered on the bottom. But Connor instantly dove in and pulled up a shiny metal object; a series of four rings with sharp points on them. He slipped them on his hand, where they gleamed like tiger claws. 

And now to choose the next Lucky 7! 

10 comments:

  1. I like your excerpt and am curious how it came to be that these children need to learn to fight what is probably a dangerous enemy. I wonder if Connor and his pointy rings have great things in store for them :)

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    1. Thanks, Mike! It was weird to excerpt just this bit from a story that's still very much under construction :)

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  2. Since I know a bit of your story, I'm finding it interesting trying to picture this scene in it. Very nice. ;-) Oh, and love the weapon. *grin*

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    1. Oh, you would love the weapon :P You and your violent ways...

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  3. I love your excerpt, Alina! I want to read more! :)

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    1. Thanks, Laird! I appreciate you tagging me!

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  4. Great excerpt! Looking forward to more. Oh, and thanks for the tag. ;)

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    1. You're welcome, Nikki! Loved your excerpt too!

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  5. Sort of makes me think of Peter Pan, the Lost Boys, and Captain Hook. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. Thanks so much, Julie! I consider that a very high honor. Ever seen the movie "Finding Neverland"? It's one of my favorites :)

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